Character Name: Glen Everard

Canon/Original: Original

Gender: Male

Age: 28

Family:
-Father: James Everard [deceased]
-Mother: Clara Everard [deceased]

Spirit:: N/A

Occupation: Physician’s Assistant / Killer

Place of Habitation: Lawley Fiefdom

Physical Description: Glen stands at about 5'7" with a medium build. He isn't overly muscular but he is fit and stronger that he looks. He has brown hair that he keeps short and cold, green-grey colored eyes. Most of the time he stays clean-shaven, but it isn't uncommon for him to be seen with stubble for a few days, particularly if he has been busy with his work. It's never around long enough to ever be called a beard, however.

One thing to note about Glen's appearance is that he is always neat and orderly. Or at least as close as neat and orderly as he can get. His clothes are typically clean and lacking stains if he can help it and are rarely too badly wrinkled.

Personality: There are two sides to Glen's personality. The side that most people see just makes them think that he's a normal person, more or less. He isn't very social, preferring to keep his own company than seeking the company of other people, but he isn't rude or hostile towards other people. If someone for some reason insists on being around him, and none of his attempts to get them to leave him alone fail, he'll just grin and bear their company. He'll be a bit nervous, especially if the other person is a woman, but eventually he'd relax and open up. It just might take a bit.

The same applies for when he is working. If told to do something he'll get right to doing it. Generally, though, he'll work alone. He's intelligent and knows how to do most of the things done in his line of work alone. But, if in a situation where he can't work alone, he'll just try to do as much as he can before the other person has to get involved.

All in all, this side of him is fine. While he doesn't really have any friends, he doesn't have any enemies either. It's his other side that, if people saw it, would give him some trouble.

Glen is constantly hiding and covering up an anger he's had and been building since he was a child because of his mother. Because of the way she "raised" him, completely neglecting him and showing him no attention or affection as is expected from a mother, he has a rather negative outlook on women. With most women it doesn't mean much, only those who act in similar ways to how his mother had should worry. He sees in women who drink, or work as prostitutes, his mother. It has gotten to the point that he despises such women and feels that it is his duty to get rid of them. Whether or not they have children, looking at them he sees mothers neglecting their children, leaving them to fend on their own, while they continue the practise that stuck them with the child in the first place. He despise them to the point that he just doesn't kill them and walk away. After killing them, he takes the time to mutilate their bodies, sometimes to the point it's hard recognizing the fact they were female in the first place.

And it is surprising to him when people react the way they do when one of his killings is discovered. He can't really wrap his mind around why people who be shocked and outraged and try to find the killer. The women he kills are just human trash in his opinion. He feels that people should be glad that they are gone. But they don't and he has stopped caring. They can worry, panic, and hunt for him all they want. Glen isn't planning on stopping until he dies.

History: The only child that his parents had, Glen wasn't born into an easy life. His mother, though married, was basically a whore and his father left them not long after he had been born. The money that the family had his mother quickly squandered away drinking, and she was too busy enjoying the company of paying men to pay much attention to her son. She only kept him around to draw in more customers.

One of her more frequent customers was the town's butcher, and when his previous assistant died he took on Glen as his new assistant. He was seven years old at the time. The butcher had hoped the favor might help gain him some more exclusive time Glen's mother but it never really paid off. But he still taught the boy some of the trade, and Glen took to the work. Both when working for the man and on his own time.

Glen started to torture and kill small animals, finding in those acts a way to release pent up anger and frustration at his mother for never paying any attention to him. He liked the feeling of power and control committing the acts gave him, and he learned how to keep doing those acts without anyone ever knowing what he was doing. All the while, feelings towards his mother deteriorated. He eventually started to hate her for never paying any attention to him. After all, he was her son, shouldn't she at least acknowledge his existence when he wasn't just bringing home some money? Watching other mothers around the town and the way they acted around their children hinted towards that much at least...

Things continued like that for a while. The butcher had no sons of his own, and as the years went on, it looked as if he was going to, ultimately, hand his business over to the boy. He had started to see Glen as the son he never had and started involving him more in the business. But, although he had thought he was bonding with Glen, he never really got Glen to open up and he never learned of what the real fate of all the missing animals around the town really was.

When Glen was twenty things changed. Age was getting to the butcher and it looked as if it wouldn't be too long before he handed over the job as the town's butcher to Glen. But he also wanted to keep it a family practice and asked for Glen's mother to marry him. Keeping it in the family was just a cover, however. He wanted to marry Glen's mother to make sure that he wouldn't end up penniless. With Glen as the town new butcher he would bring in money to keep his mother and new father supported.

The plan failed, though, when Glen's mother refused the butcher's proposal. The two caused a scene which ultimately ended with Glen's mother refusing to let the butcher use her services anymore. It was a big enough scene that when Glen's mother was found, well, butchered the next day that everyone blamed the butcher and he was summarily hung for murder. His cries that he was innocent were ignored, of course. No one had considered the woman's own son had actually killed her.

It had been the perfect opportunity in Glen's eyes. The hate he felt towards his mother had been getting unbearable. The fight she had with the butcher had given him the perfect chance to kill her and get away with the crime. He left town a few days after the butcher had been hung, taking with him money taken from both his mother and the butcher.

Glen quickly found, though, that his hate and anger hadn't died with his mother. When he saw a prostitute in the Heaton Fiefdom that turned away a child beggar asking her for enough coin for some bread, he saw his mother. The hate and anger he had thought was gone came right back, and that woman was found dead, her body horribly mutilated, sometime the next day. Several more prostitutes died in the next month before Glen left the fiefdom when he had almost been caught my city guardsmen one night. He had been cornered and asked why blood was all over him. He had lied, making up some story with him as a physician's assistant that by some stroke of luck they believed, and they let him go on his way.

After leaving he figured actually becoming a physician's assistant would help him in case he was ever cornered like that again. While he was sure not all guardsmen would be that easy to fool, actually having the name of a physician to send them to would help his story. It wasn't like he would be planning on being caught that often anyway, but the cover would help. Making his way around the fiefdoms, he did what he could to find a physician looking for an assistant, while depleting the population of prostitutes in any town or city he went through.

Plot Potential: He's a killer that primarily targets prostitutes, so he could cause some trouble if he were to end up around the border garrisons. The soldiers probably wouldn't like the women that "take care" of them being killed off and the camp followers would probably be stuck with deciding to stay and risk being the next one killed or leaving and finding another place to "work".

If there are any physicians are in need of an assistant Glen could help. Uhh...This is all I can think of. If anyone else has any ideas you can PM me.

SAMPLE RP:

Again. He had to go out again.

Glen knew that it was risky. Killing the night right after his last kill would increase the chance of being spotted by a city guardsman. Patrols were still going to be doubled as the night before hadn't been his first kill in this city. To be safe he really should wait at least a couple of days before going out again. But after what he had seen earlier that day he couldn't help himself. Another woman had to die.

She had just been too much like his own mother to let live another night. A young boy had tugged on her skirts, asking for just enough coin to buy a loaf of bread. The woman had turned him away claiming she had no money and once he was gone she went on to buy herself a drink. It was exactly something his mother would have done. It had been all he could do not to just kill her then. God knew she deserved it. But killing her in open daylight would have had in locked away pretty quickly. Going to prison would make his job to kill women like that rather difficult.

First things first, however. He had to change his clothes. It was a lot easy to get a prostitute to approach him if he looked like he had some money. Trash like her always flocked to those with money. So he had managed to get his hands on a somewhat fancy tunic, breeches, and boots. Just something to make him look like a prosperous merchant. If the woman asked he could say that he was just staying in the city for the night and he wanted some company before getting back onto the road sometime the next day. It worked better than just going out in his normal clothes. Plus, if someone saw him, the city guard would be looking for someone better dressed that he was in the daytime.

Slipping a dagger into his boot he headed out onto the streets. The night before had been his first kill in this city and before that he had spent the week learning his way around the city, where the guards patrolled at night, and all the alleyways he could use as shortcuts to bypass guards to to loose them in the chance he ended up in a chase. Just running down the street with guards right behind him was just likely to give him a crossbow bolt between his shoulder blades.

He avoided the patrols out that night as he made his way to the area that the woman worked. It was an alleyway not far from a tavern. The tavern he knew she went to spend the money she "earned". Well he hoped she had enjoyed that drink she had earlier because it was going to be her last. Actually, on second though, he hoped she had choked, and after that her day had been miserable. What he was going to do would be a fitting end to a miserable day.

Looking around to make sure no guardsmen were around, he stopped by the entrance to the alley. All he had to do now was wait for her to approach him and soon enough, the woman from earlier was walking over towards him. In short time she was leading him into the alley. Turning to face him once they were out of the open, she sized him up, as if deciding how much money to charge him for, before stepping up close to him, hand on his chest and pushing him back against the wall.

"So tell me, honey...What can I do for you?"

Glen just grinned and placed his hands on her shoulders. It was all he could do to hide his disgust at being so close to, and actually touching, a piece of living trash like her. He was going to have to remember to get some gloves for future acts.

Checking once more to make sure they were alone, the grin turned to a scowl, and before the woman could do anything his hands shoots from her shoulders to wrap around her neck. Squeezing hard to cut off her breathing he forced her down to the ground, ignoring her attempts to hit him or pry his hands off of her neck. The woman's eyes were wide with terror as she tried frantically to get free. Glen just grinned coldly, enjoying her terror, and watched as the life started draining out of her eyes. In minutes he had another kill to add to his count.

Once she was dead he laid her out on the ground, spread eagle, before straddling her waist and drawing his dagger. Not a sound had been made and he knew guardsmen wouldn't investigate a dark alley without something to catch their attention first. He had all the time he would need. Slicing the dagger across her throat to start draining her blood, he waited a few seconds before slicing down her neck. The woman didn't physically resemble his mother at all, but that was all he could see when he looked at her. He would have to cut that look off of her...

What's the name of the Creator God the Endikai worship?: ((Perfect))

The substance of your application is fine; the logistics are fine, the description is fine... but I'm not convinced. You haven't fully shown us his motivation. It takes, I would imagine, a certain anger, a certain way of thinking, to wilfully kill so many people; don't you think? As is, I see a relatively mild person who just happens to like killing people. It's fine if he acts that way on the outside, but RP isn't a movie; it's in writing, and you're allowed (encouraged) to explore your character's psyche more fully. In short, I'd like you to add to the description of his personality, add in more on his motivation and his mental state; what he thinks when he's killing; I'd also like it if you'd edit the RP sample with that consideration in mind.

Otherwise, I'm very much in favor of this character. Mind, operating at the garrisons would be dangerous, to say the least, since a lot of the prostitutes enjoy the services of a pimp, who won't take kindly to someone picking them off like flies. And, you know, soldiers all around.

But danger's fun, isn't it?

So: I just need more convincing as to the character, really. Does that make sense?

PM me if you have any questions, and thanks for your patience.

Alright, I fixed up the Personality to hopefully give more insight to why he does what he does, and re-wrote and fixed the History and RP to show it. I hope...

Hmmm. Sam's the Admin, and this is a tricky app-so I think I'll leave this one to her.

There is a problem, though. The motive is convincing. The target works. What doesn't jive is that this is a loner type of guy, basically decent around other people, who likes to give money to kids-and who goes around killing in his spare time? o_O It's just hard to swallow. Murder requires such a lack of human conscience that I can't see this guy waltzing the way he is...

Not sure what Sam thinks about this. Like I said, wait for her. Just some thoughts.

I do want to say thank you for taking the time to fix this up for us; I know it gets frustrating but it really means a lot that you do. Once this app is polished up to a mirror finish, I have to say that I'm looking forward to having such a dedicated member around. Keep at it! :)

Yeah, I know what you mean about that part being hard to swallow. I just can't seem to get what I have in mind for him out in a way that it sounds right and makes sense. I might just scrap that part of him, but before I'll do I'll wait to see if there is anything else I should fix as well. I just still don't like his personality altogether right now...I just don't think I have it right, yet at the same time, I don't know what else to do.

So yeah, anyway, I'll just wait and see if this passes or fails again before changing anything.

You know, my gut feeling is that this isn't going to fly with the Admin. Why don't you keep trying? If you think you can do better, go for it. If, on the other hand, this is getting frustrating for you (I'd completely understand if it was), why don't you try making a new character and playing with them for awhile? We could hold this app for you until inspiration strikes. Or, you could completely simplify what you have here and have something happen IN RP to make it work. Nothing wrong with starting simple; it leaves you places to go.

Please don't be discouraged; this is a heroic effort you're making and I'm sure we can work through it.

I took out that small part at the end of his personality about him giving money to kids in situations like he had grown up in. The rest of the personality section sounds better, I think, without it. Though I honestly doubt I could do better if I were to try rewritting this again. I have a hard enough time writing a character's personality and history to begin with. I'll wait a bit before giving it a third go.

And I have an idea for another character, I'm just reading around some to figure out a few more things for him before creating him.

Thank you; this is much better.

You've put so much time and effort into this, it gives me great pleasure to say that you are accepted! :) I'm sorry it took us so long, but your patience is commendable and I really hope that you have a blast on Thiasa to make up for the long wait.

If you're looking for any threads to start out, my soldier Thomas Mochrie is at the border garrisons....and rather a metaphorical knight in shining armor who places the defense of women above anything else.....so that could be very, very, very interesting... *winks*

At any rate, I have no doubts that Glen will be even more fleshed out the more you play with him, so go ahead and start playing. Knock yourself out (you deserve that). Just always be mindful of character, and thank you very much for working so hard!