CHARACTERS!!!!
Delta-me
wrath-(real wrath)
izumi
sig
al
ed
winry
THIS WAS A DREAM I HAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
One afternoon, while Delta was on the train to Central,two people walked in her room where she slept "Brother! There's someone in here all ready!" the other stranger said "He wont mind..." as he taped her shoulder she woke-up "Oh, its ok you can stay here!!" then she fell back to sleep without noticing what she was talking about.
"Ok?! that was wierd...it sounded as if she didnt know what she was talking about."
then the stranger said "Well, she said that we can stay..." Late at night the stranger slept next to Delta, as she felt his back she started seeing pictures of a beautiful women with dark brown hair and a girl with long blonde hair. As she saw the images of a small boy loosing his body little by little, she started crying.The first stranger woke-up and taped Delta and asked "Miss?!! are you ok?!!MISS?!!"
She saw the stranger, it was a huge armor. Her eyes were tearing up and yelled out "AL, HE'S SORRY I SWEAR HE'S SORRY!!!!!" and then he looked and said "MISS,?!!how do you know my name?!!"She said "well uh...i dont know" then
they both turned to Ed and he was wide awake with his eyes wide open and said "WHO ARE YOU?!!!how do you know what i just dreamd about?!!!?!?!?" she looked at Ed."huh?!!!" he looked at her really close then said "WHO ARE YOU?!!!"
then her eyes were sad. "I...I....dont know!!!" Ed and Al looked at her then both of them said "YOU DON'T KNOW?!!" then Al said "Dont you have a name?!!" then she said "yeah it's...Delta." Then Ed said "Well hi, look i dont know how you were able to see my memories but, nice to meet you." then he took her hand and said "Hi, I'm E....." as she took her hand slowly he saw pictures of her at the gate, but her eyes were diffrent. He droped her hand and just looked at her then said "WHO...who really are you!?!?" as she looked at him in his eyes she thought 'those eyes...but where?' so then she asked "did you see it?!" he nodded and she yelled out "TELL ME, WHAT DID YOU SEE?!!! TELL ME!!!!"he freaked as if she was crazy.
PART 2 WILL BE HERE SOME TIME!!!
It could use editing. When writing, excessive use of question and explanation marks isn't usually a plus...
While I think I understand what you're getting at, try getting more into the mindset of the characters. If you need to, feel free to back up and describe the area. Your goal should to be to draw in the reader to the point they can actually feel and think along with the characters. Don't worry; you'll get there... we all wrote like this at some point, and that said I've read much, much worse. While it could use some help, the basics are there. ^^