Here is a funny cowboy bebop short that i made about ed(not ed from Fma)

*ship floats through space*
jet: we picked this up while on earth it has some kind of cemicial that is soposed to make people more aware or something...i think its called...kaffine
*jet slams rusty can on the table infront of ed, spike, faye, and ein*
spike: reed ball?
faye: red bull, you iliterate moron
*ed jumps up and runs over to the computer*
ed: it was a mass preduction of energy drink poular in the 20th centery
faye: energy drink huh?
*grabs can and opens it*
spike: hey! what about me!
*grabs can and almost drinks*
jet: i bought it i should get it!!
*3 fight over can endlessly*
ed: can i have some?
*everyone stops and looks at him*
jet: kid your already energized enough as it is, one sip and you would be a human battery
*everyone goes back to fighting*
*can flys out of their hands and lands on the infront of ed*
ed: YUMMY!
*ed grabs can and chugs whole things as everyone else stare if horror*
*BURP* ed: yummy...but bitter...
*ed looks around at everyone else*
*nobody is moving at all*
ed: what?
*all of them move in slow motion*
ed: why are you being so sloooooooooooooow?
*ed jumps in the air and falls slowly*
ed: woah! everything is all sloooooooooow...AWSOME!
*ed looks at can in his hand*
ed: its the drink!
ed: thats whats making everything slow...o guess jet was right...I AM THE HUMAN BATTERY!!!

... Ed's a girl... and they have coffee in the show... and... uh... >> Sorry. I'm a fangirl of that series, Spike especially, so...

I agree, twas funny, but Ed IS a girl, and I have only seen a few episodes. Oh, and yes, stay out of ALL topics w/Michico, she OWNS cowboy bebop...FYI.

well she sure pushes her fangirlness on other people <_<

I agree, she did seem a BIT pushy. She didn't even comment on the lit. Ah well. Maybe she was just in a bad mood. Don't worry bout it, I thought it was good! ^_^

Sorry... it wasn't a good day. ^^; I was tired and upset.... lesse.

It sounds sort of a chat, which I know is its own style, so I'll critique it that way. Hmmm.

True, the three fight over things and someone else gets it, kudos points there. Also, I liked the basic idea od Edward on caffeine... even though the idea of both that and alchohol in her system scares me. e.e

Overall...

It's cute and harmless, so I really had no reason to be that way. ^^; A little humor never hurt anyone. And it is an amusing concept.

I'd say just watch a little more, and you'll come up with something priceless. For someone who isn't an obsessor of the show, you still gave tribute to it - I'm sorry I bit off your head earlier.

All you need to work on is getting into the character's personas and mindsets, and maybe little details... other than that, you've got it. ^^ Keep it up!